Minggu, 04 Maret 2012

Traffic Jam in Jakarta

Traffic jam was one common thing in Jakarta . Especially when the time is flooded or the road is under construction it takes a long time to get back home. Nowadays, Cars and motorbikes are increasing which all the people are not discipline and make the traffic not controlled for example Metromini bus cannot stop everywhere they like but stop at the bus stop. Secondly, The government made Trans Jakarta Bus with their separate roadway which make the road more smaller. To make the traffic to be more better . Firstly, they must be discipline and not thinking that the road is for their own sake and they need to be fast. But now, even if the government start working on the traffic its hard as population is increasing and people need transportation . In conclusion, to help the traffic to be more better is by the people judging their self to be discipline.

1 komentar:

  1. Sentence structure and grammar could be improved. Try to use a wider range of vocabulary or better word choices. Watch your punctuation. Lacking coherence and cohesion between sentences (inappropriate use of "secondly" and "firstly"), but good structure (appropriate introductory and concluding sentence).

    BalasHapus